Wednesday, 27 February 2013

100 word challenge. By Jessica Darmody


...The car stopped suddenly...
A man was  on his way to the airport until something strange happened.The car nearly crashed because of a flying elephant that had only one eye and a brown tale.It had flew across the car because of a cruel teacher with blond and brown  hair!The car nearly crashed because of it and people could have died. The car had squeaked as the driver stamped on the brake so hard!  He must of been hurt really badly.All of a sudden the driver had a really bad heart attack but no one was to see it.

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6 comments:

  1. Anonymous27 February 2013 at 14:19

    Wow that's so amazing your such a superstar! By Eugena Mwita

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  2. Unknown27 February 2013 at 14:22

    Thank you and a bet yours is the amazing too!

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  3. Unknown27 February 2013 at 14:26

    Wow that was an amazing 100 word challenge the end kept me in suspense by Alisha Maguire

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  4. Unknown27 February 2013 at 14:27

    Thank to very much!

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  5. Unknown27 February 2013 at 14:27

    It's ok

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  6. Mrs Halford Team 100wc4 March 2013 at 07:55

    Hello Jessica, this was a fun 100wc. I liked how you explained why everything happened. Next time try to start your sentences in different ways. For example, rather than,'The car had squeaked as the driver stamped on the brake so hard!', begin the sentence with a verb so it would be,' Stamping hard on the brake, the driver brought the car to a squeaky stop.'
    Keep on writing :)

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